Saturday, July 16, 2011

What do you think of these lyrics I wrote?

This seems really thought over and nicely done. I like the whole idea. Out of curiosity, what genre are you going to sing this song in, if you are going to sing it? The lyrics are very well written, but when you are singing it make sure that the beat is right and that the rhyming is also touched up, because sometimes it doesn't sound as good when it's not as "rhyme-y". Also, I'm just a tad confused by your motive. In the first few lines, it seemed as if you were trying to say that just because someone had more power, or wealth, it didn't make them better than people who had none at all. But, then, you are talking about how power will end up badly, if I understand correctly. In the chorus, please tell me your motive, because I was a little confused that it didn't have to do with the verses other than saying king and pawn. After, you are talking about what it would be like to be a pawn, simply put. The writing and the whole idea is great, I just need some more information, or "smoothness". Great job!

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